Let Us Explain…

Yesterday was such a lovely day that we decided to work outside for an hour.  Under the shade of an old oak tree, surrounded by fresh country air and a refreshing breeze we drafted and revised our explanations about Egyptian Mummies.

 

 

 

The previous day we gathered information and recorded it in a planning template like the one below.  This was a very important part of the writing process because we didn’t know a lot about how mummies were made.  The template was split into sections to help us write our explanations in the right order.  We had to record the information in our own words.

 

 

After organising our ideas it was time to draft.  We had to make sure we followed the correct structure.

An explanation has:

* An introduction which is a general opening statement that introduces and defines the topic

* Sequenced statements that describe the actions in the order they happen

* A concluding statement

* Supporting diagrams (optional)

 

Aidan’s explanation:

How Were Mummies Made?

A mummy is a dead human body that has been preserved for a long time.  People made mummies 5000 years ago.

It took 70 days to make one mummy.  First, the mummy makes removed all the internal organs, including the brain.  However, they kept the heart because they believed that the soul was kept in the heart. 

Next, the Egyptians applied chemicals to remove the moisture from the body.  Then they wrapped the body in bandages made of linen cloth.  They placed lucky charms between each layer.

Once the body was prepared. It was put is a stone or wood coffin.  The coffins were decorated with pictures of the gods.

Finally, they carried it to a tomb.  The priests performed a ceremony called the Opening of the Mouth ritual.  Family members placed items and food in the tomb to keep the spirit alive.

Making mummies was a long process but Egyptian people believed it was very important.

 

Explanations are a non-fiction text because they are about true things.  Other non-fiction texts are procedures, information reports, recounts and persuasive texts.

 

Have you ever worked outside?  Tell us about it!

What type of non-fiction texts have you read or written?

What would you like us to explain next?

 

The End

Earlier this term our friends Mrs Smith and 4/5DS in Tasmania sent us the first 100 words of a narrative.  Our job?  To write the ending in 100 words.  We did a similar project in Term 2 with Frole Island, except we wrote the first part of the story and they finished it.  Click HERE to read our Term 2 narratives.

The Frole Islanders thought the ending was harder to write than the beginning.  So, we were keen to test out the theory and we AGREE!  We had a great time thinking of possible endings and wonder if they are the endings the original authors had in mind?  Our endings are written in purple.

 

Do you think the beginning or ending of a narrative would be harder to write? Why?

Sur – prise!!!

It all started when 4/5P and 5/6JC got called over the loudspeaker to go to their classrooms at recess. We were wondering what was happening. We saw the lanyards and thought that we were going on an excursion. We all felt a little bit confused until we saw the Mystery Excursion tickets that said:

 

We quickly hopped on the bus and had three clues about  the Mystery Excursion. Our first clue was ‘Friends’ and a little while later we got two more clues, ‘Performance’ and ‘100’.  After the clues, people started guessing: King Kong, another primary school, Hoyts or IMAX. We were pretty sure that it was Killara Primary School after we had our third clue. The reason was because we had sent 100 word narratives to Killara PS for them to complete.

 

 

When we got there, Miss Fraser greeted us with a bearded dragon (lizard) called Sheldon on her shoulder. Soon we were at her classroom and we met the students who had completed our 100 word narratives. As we were reading our narratives we were wondering if they would finish the way we thought they would. We were surprised at some of the endings!  You can read all of our narratives by clicking on the bottom right hand corner of the texts below.  KPS’s endings are in red font.

 

After that our partners gave us a tour of the school. We were shown the gym and after we had finished we went back to the gym to play Penguin Olympics and Golden Child.

We then went to our last activity for the day which was to watch KPS’s school production, Wiping Out Waste (WOW). It was a good production about how to stop people littering. It was an original musical written by their Performing Arts teacher.

We had a great day and hope to see them again soon!

 

Have you been to a live performance before?

What was your favourite part of the Mystery Excursion?

What surprised you about KPS?

200 Word Narratives

Last week we wrote the first 100 words of a narrative with a partner and then emailed them to our blogging friends at Killara Primary School so they could write the next (and last) 100 words.

We had to make sure that we introduced our characters, setting, some events and the beginning of a problem.  It was quite a challenge to use 100 words exactly.  The title did not count in the final word count.  To make sure we used 100 words exactly we had to spend a lot of time choosing the right words and revising our narratives.  We are looking forward to reading the end of the narratives soon!

You can read the start of some of our narratives below. 

 


 How would you end the narratives above?

Leave us the first 100 words of a narrative in a comment! 

Alien Project

Towards the end of Term Two we focussed on writing information reports.  We learnt that good information reports have:
* A general opening statement or classification
* A description
* Related information grouped into paragraphs

* Sub headings
* Summary
* Visual text (photos, diagrams, maps etc.)
* Specialised language
* Present tense
* Use third person
* Sentences with one or more facts

To conclude our report writing focus we wrote a report about a fictional alien to share with Mrs Smith and our friends in 5/6CS in Tasmania.  As they had been learning about Space,  Mrs S suggested we write a report about an alien.  We sent them a copy of our reports (without the visual diagram). 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 
Students in 5/6CS recreated our original aliens from the description in our reports. Check out the results in the slideshow below.

 

 
5/6CS also gave us valuable feedback on our report writing skills.  We sent them a checklist to use about the structure, language and features of our reports.  They filled them in and posted them back to us.
 

Report checklist completed by 5/6CS students

 

Feedback and advice from 5/6CS

 

Feedback and advice from 5/6CS

 

We really enjoyed creating our aliens, writing our reports, sharing them with 5/6CS and reading their feedback. Thank you for working with us Mrs Smith and 5/6CS!

 Have you ever written an information report?  What was it about?

What type of alien would you create?